First Batch of Equestria Pruina

So today I was outside. I was playing with my family dog, Floki, and I was enjoying the fresh air and beautiful skies offered by the sunset. And wandering around, seeing a frosty wasteland, I had an idea for a story. So here's a new thing I will be doing: First Batches. Here I will be posting very rough drafts for stories and seeing if anyone has comments. Enjoy tearing this apart, I know I will. Feel free to message me you're critics.

Equestria Pruina ©

Long ago in the magical land of Equestria, everything was perfect. Ruled over by a pair of magnanimous twin sisters, and guarded by the legendary wielders of harmony, the kingdom and its neighbors weathered numerous cataclysms and experienced unprecedented prosperity as unseen before the Nightmare War. Together, the rulers Luna and Celestia, along with Princess Twilight and her loyal friends, built Equestria into the wonder of the world.The reach of the rulers expanded beyond the borders of Equestria into the wilderness beyond, bringing in new ideas and new species as well as old. The new borders spread unto the coastal waters of the Great Capricorn Sea, bringing Equestria into contact with the Zebra Lands. While also bringing the changelings of the Great Wastes, now a shattered specter of the monstrous threat they were once, into the New Equestria. Meanwhile seeking to understand the cosmos she had once been banished to and which she had once banished her sister two, the Royal sisters funded a space program to the creation of extra-planetary colonies to better understand the universe. Led by the finest science ponies and astromancers the world had to offer, the first colony was established on the frosty moon of Faxi, A distant but habitable moon at the very edge of the solar system. There the science ponies and first colonists discovered the remnants of ancient gods long since frozen, and a great dark sea beneath the layers of ice. Thousands transferred, seeing an opportunity for discovery and new opportunities, but most only finding cold and wildlife from their own world grown feral and mutated by magic. Faxi may be a beautiful moon, but it is a cold one. And being so distant from the warmth of Celestia’s sun or the watching gaze of Luna, many inhabitants feel utterly alone. The trip to Faxi from Equestria is at least 20 years, and fewer and fewer trips have occurred lately. Now many towns have declared themselves independent of Equestria, and much of the planet is entirely locally run. On a cold barren planet, rich in secrets and predators, alone and at the edge of the solar system, it seems nothing is sacred to ponies these days. Perhaps not even friendship.